Please Help Me Make a Decision about Book V of the Locket Saga
Book V of the Locket Saga: In the Shadow of the Millpond is nearing completion!
I am looking for help in two areas. The first is that I would like you to check out my book’s description. Do you like it? Even more important, how would you change it?
Fifteen-year-old Lacey Mayford has been infatuated with Matthew since she was a little girl, but Matthew doesn’t see her as anything more than a little girl cousin. How can she convince him that she is not only not his cousin,.she is also growing into a beautiful young woman.
In the frontier town of Pittsburgh, PA near the turn of the century, Matthew Thorton is blamed for Luther Hannibal’s murder because of an altercation that Matthew had with the man over some stolen furs. As a half-breed Indian, Matthew seems to have a chance to defend himself so Lacey with the help of a teacher at the Pittsburgh Academy, Felix Grackle, look into other suspects who could have killed Luther Hannibal. At the same time, Matthew’s father Luke and Luke’s best friend Jacque Pierre is looking for whoever it was who stole the furs because they believe that this person might have something to do with Luther Hannibal’s murder.
A vigilante group heightens the danger. They are seeking to do everything they can to avoid a whiskey sales tax that has been imposed on them from stealing the US mail to tarring and feathering US government officials attempting to collect those taxes.
Will Lacey be able to clear Matthew’s name? Will Luke and Jacque Pierre find the man who stole the furs? Will the vigilantes stop the Whiskey Rebellion without bloodshed? The truth is far more sinister than anything that anyone could imagine.
What do you think of this description? Would you read this book? What do you think would improve it? Now that you’ve checked out the description, check out these book covers. Which book cover do you think best fits this book?
Which Book Cover Do You Like Best?
Comment below about which of the following seven book covers do you prefer that goes with this description? Which one is best? (Please refer to the book cover(s) you prefer by the corresponding letter).
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A) In the Shadow of the Millpond
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B) In the Shadow of the Millpond
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c) In the Shadow of the Millpond
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D) IN the Shadow of the Millpond
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E) In the Shadow of the Millpond
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F) In the Shadow of the Millpond
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G) In the Shadow of the Millpond
Which is your favorite? Which book would you be likely to pick up? Please share your answer in the comment section below! Please share with your friends! Please help me make this the best book of the Locket Saga!
As Author Cygnet Brown, Donna Brown is the author and publisher of historical fiction series The Locket Saga. which includes When God Turned His Head and Soldiers Don’t Cry, the Locket Saga Continues, and, A Coward’s Solace, Book III of the Locket Saga, Book IV of the Locket Saga: Sailing Under the Black Flag! Her next book Book V of the Locket Saga: In the Shadow of the Millpond will be out later this year!
.For more information about Cygnet Brown and buy her books, check out her website at http://www.cygnetbrow.com
Author Cygnet Brown 
I would read the book, but the description is too wordy….it tends to ramble on. Try to make it more succinct. 🙂
Thanks for the feedback!
Hi Donna, I like B the best of these.
Donna,
Here is a suggestion – cut to 199 words, more direct but same exact sentiment.
Fifteen-year-old Lacey Mayford has been infatuated with Matthew since she was a little girl. Matthew, a half-breed Indian, doesn’t see her as anything more than a little girl cousin. How can she convince him that she is growing into a beautiful young woman he should consider?
In the frontier town near the turn of the century, Matthew Thorton is blamed for Luther Hannibal’s murder after an altercation with Luther over stolen furs. Lacey defends Matthew with the help of a teacher, Felix Grackle. They look into other suspects who could have killed Luther Hannibal. Matthew’s father Luke and his best friend Jacque Pierre are looking for the person responsible for stealing the furs. They believe the thief might have something to do with Luther Hannibal’s murder.
A vigilante group seeks to avoid the imposed whiskey sales tax. The group goes to extremes; they steal the US mail and tar and feathering U.S. government officials who attempt to collect those taxes.
Will Lacey be able to clear Matthew’s name? Will Luke and Jacque Pierre find the man who stole the furs? Will the vigilantes stop the Whiskey Rebellion without bloodshed? The truth is far more sinister than anyone could imagine.